Thursday, December 17, 2009

What I needed to say

~Puppy Love~

I know we are only in the the 5th grade,
and I know that we really can't know love yet.
But I know you,
and I like what I know.

You made me laugh,
even if I was sad.
You made me feel happy
and protected always.

Even if I was wary the first time you came
up to me and said "pull my finger"
and I asked "why?"
You didn't say and just sat there waiting for me to go ahead
one finger tug later you didn't make a fart noise
or anything like.
You just made me laugh through my tears.

I knew from that moment on
that we could be the best of friends.
But things change as they often do.
1st grade, 2nd, 3rd and 4th
You were always my friend.
But when 5th grade came around you had to move.
And I never got to see your smiling face.

And so I wish I could have told you then
that I liked you
and to tell you now that I think of you often.

1. Is there anything wrong with the capitalization?

2. Do you think I "tell" and don't "show" and if I do what do you suggest to change it?

Monday, December 7, 2009

Love for You~

One sky, one world, one destiny.
Is that all I am to thee?
Am I not the moon and the stars
that you hung from those monkey bars,
on a lonely winter's eve?
If thats all I am to eyes so blue
with that wonderful green hue.
I'll ask you how, and I'll ask you now
that you would be so cruel.
Then I'd ask you to smile, a wonderful smile
so I could add some spunk,
to this wonderfully broken heart.

Writing Poems

I want, I want to write a poem,
as lovely as a rose.
And have it heard by nearly every bird,
so sweet it is to hear.
Though by and by, I know not why
those words so hard to bear.
My love for you cannot be true,
for those words I'd learned to fear.

~Sam~ (a time my world changed school version)


~Sam~

What is pain?
Is it being with you and not seeing that you could leave,
Or is it knowing that we won’t be together forever
Like I had planned.

The talks we had
The tears I shed
How do they make you feel?
When you look over me and see
That I’m having a hard time without you.

There was no one else that I thought
That would love me as you did
Whenever I came home you were always the first to greet me.

So imagine my surprise and sorrow
When I come home and you aren’t there to greet me anymore
You have been with me since almost day one
You have always held a special place in my heart.

When you decided it was time to go
Did you think about the lives that would be changed forever?

For now whenever I think of you
My heart feels heavy and I’m always close to tears.

So now you know that I truly loved you
And now that I told you
I think its time to say,
I have to let you go…

1. What do you think about the message? Is it clear?
2. What do I need to work on?

Monday, November 30, 2009

Poetry?

~Sam~


What is pain?

Is it being with you and not seeing that you could leave,

Or is it knowing that we won’t be together forever

Like I had planned.


The talks we had

The tears I shed

How do they make you feel?

When you look over me and see

That I’m having a hard time without you.


There was no one else that I thought

That would love me as you did

Whenever I came home you were always the first to greet me.


So imagine my surprise and sorrow

When I come home and you aren’t there to greet me anymore

You have been with me since almost day one

You have always held a special place in my heart.


When you decided it was time to go

Did you think about the lives that would be changed forever?

For now whenever I think of you

My heart feels heavy and I’m always close to tears.


So now you know that I truly loved you

And now that I told you

I think its time to say,

Adieu.


(So I know that its not supposed to rhyme so I am changing the ending but I liked it this way and decided that I wanted to post it as is)

Monday, November 23, 2009

10 Minute Play: Toni's Party Traditions

[Scene starts with a group of girls waking up to an alarm of a j-pop song]

MAY
[making morning mumbling sounds as she reached for her phone to shut off the alarm]

Hey guys, time to get up...

[CASSIE, ANNA, WINERY, CRYSTAL, KARI and RUBY all start to get up, some faster than others]

CRYSTAL
[stretches] What time is it? [sleepy]

MAY
Its 10:30 Crystal.

CASSIE
[sighes] Yea, I guess we should wake up now...[yawns]

[as the girls wake-up they notice that Toni hasn't gotten up yet]

MAY & KARI
[at the same time] WAKE UP!

TONI
[grumbles]

[while MAY and KARI continue to pester TONI to get up the rest of the girls get ready for the day]

RUBY
[goes over to TONI and whines]
Get up I want to start the fight!

TONI
[angry grumbles and then burrows deeper into her blankets]

CASSIE & WINERY
[looks at one another and smiles]
Then why don't we just start?

ANNA
[smiles funny]
Yes, lets...
[grabs a bag of marshmallows and rips it open takes one out and throws it at TONI's form]

TONI
eep!! ... ow...

[everyone goes still, waiting for something to signal the start of the "fight"]

CASSIE
[slowly starts to sneak over to the spot she usally is in when this happens while grabbing a bag]

[All the sudden everyone but CASSIE starts moving in on TONI then they start their attack on TONI and one another]

RUBY
[laughs]
Time to wake-
[gets hit on the butt with a marshmallow]

CASSIE
[starts laughing]
I GOT YOU IN THE BUTT!!
[laughs again and then gets hit by a marshmallow]
HEY!
[laughs]

[WINERY, CRYSTAL and KARI move to the other side of the room so they can have more space to move]

TONI
Nya nya you can't get me...eep!!
[holds up her blanket just in time to deflect some marshmallows]

CRYSTAL
Wow its almost like a war...

CASSIE
[snickers]
yea...FRIENDLY FIRE!!
[throws one at CRYSTAL]

ANNA
AH HA!
[looks down shirt, laughs]
There's one down my shirt!

[everyone laughs]

CASSIE
[throws one at ANNA]
HA! I got your butt!!
[laughs]

RUBY
[throws one at CASSIE]
Oh snap face shot!
[does a happy dance]

CASSIE
OH Kari...guess what?!

KARI
[looks at CASSIE]
Nani?

CASSIE
[smiles]
Kip, kip, kip, kip, kip, kip, kip, kip

KARI
[while CASSIE is saying 'kip']
STOP!!! please! why must you do this?!?!

RUBY
Guys! guys...check it out... so I heard ya like mudkips?

GROUP
Would ya ever want a mudkip? ...... WELL WE JUST HAPPEN TO BE MUDKIPS!!

KARI
[in a sing-song voice]
oh Cassie...

CASSIE
[in a sing-song voice]
whatie?

ANNA
MARSHMALLOW TO THE FACE!!!
[throws at CASSIE before KARI can respond]

KARI
Anna...I wanted to do that...

RUBY
Toni...whats for breakfast? I'm hungry...

TONI
[thinks for a minute]
Doughnuts...

CRYSTAL
[to MAY]
Does sempi like sprinkles doughnuts?

MAY
How did you know?!

RUBY
She's just that good i guess...

TONI
[stomach rumbles]
I'm hungry...

KARI
Toni you are always hungry...

TONIS MOM
Guys the cinnamon rolls are done...

RUBY
You said we were having doughnuts...

TONI
[laughs and smiles]
I guess we will have to wait 'till next time...

-END


1. What do you think about the people? If they need work what kind?

2. How is the flow of the story? Does it start too slow?

Thursday, November 12, 2009

I GET IT NOW!! ^_^

so...

yea...ok then i am still trying to figure out how this thing works...