OH M JAY!

guys its 2010! isn't that amazing!? I like the title it makes no sense to me whatsoever. oh well its funny and i like the funny!

What I needed to say v3?

~Puppy Love~

I know we are only in the the 5th grade,
and I know that we really can't know love yet.
But I know you,
and I like what I know.

You made me laugh,
even if I was sad.
You made me feel happy
and protected always.

Even if I was wary the first time you came
up to me and said "pull my finger"
and I asked "why?"
You didn't say and just sat there waiting for me to go ahead
one finger tug later you didn't make a fart noise
or anything like.
You just made me laugh through my tears.

I knew from that moment on
that we could be the best of friends.
1st grade, 2nd, 3rd and 4th
You were always my friend.

You could always made me smile and made me feel like you really cared.

Giving me a toy truck of yours when I had built a bridge.

Stopping my tears when someone made me cry (yes I know that wasn’t very hard back then)

Telling me stories about how you and some other people got into fights

I was happy.

But when 5th grade came around you had to move.
And I never got to see your smiling face.

And so I wish I could have told you then
that I liked you
and to tell you now that I think of you often.

too much? did I add too much background?

*goes to look at ver.1* I don't know... -_-

What I needed to say

~Puppy Love~

I know we are only in the the 5th grade,
and I know that we really can't know love yet.
But I know you,
and I like what I know.

You made me laugh,
even if I was sad.
You made me feel happy
and protected always.

Even if I was wary the first time you came
up to me and said "pull my finger"
and I asked "why?"
You didn't say and just sat there waiting for me to go ahead
one finger tug later you didn't make a fart noise
or anything like.
You just made me laugh through my tears.

I knew from that moment on
that we could be the best of friends.
But things change as they often do.
1st grade, 2nd, 3rd and 4th
You were always my friend.
But when 5th grade came around you had to move.
And I never got to see your smiling face.

And so I wish I could have told you then
that I liked you
and to tell you now that I think of you often.

1. Is there anything wrong with the capitalization?

2. Do you think I "tell" and don't "show" and if I do what do you suggest to change it?

Love for You~

One sky, one world, one destiny.
Is that all I am to thee?
Am I not the moon and the stars
that you hung from those monkey bars,
on a lonely winter's eve?
If thats all I am to eyes so blue
with that wonderful green hue.
I'll ask you how, and I'll ask you now
that you would be so cruel.
Then I'd ask you to smile, a wonderful smile
so I could add some spunk,
to this wonderfully broken heart.

Writing Poems

I want, I want to write a poem,
as lovely as a rose.
And have it heard by nearly every bird,
so sweet it is to hear.
Though by and by, I know not why
those words so hard to bear.
My love for you cannot be true,
for those words I'd learned to fear.

~Sam~ (a time my world changed school version)

~Sam~

What is pain?
Is it being with you and not seeing that you could leave,
Or is it knowing that we won’t be together forever
Like I had planned.

The talks we had
The tears I shed
How do they make you feel?
When you look over me and see
That I’m having a hard time without you.

There was no one else that I thought
That would love me as you did
Whenever I came home you were always the first to greet me.

So imagine my surprise and sorrow
When I come home and you aren’t there to greet me anymore
You have been with me since almost day one
You have always held a special place in my heart.

When you decided it was time to go
Did you think about the lives that would be changed forever?
For now whenever I think of you
My heart feels heavy and I’m always close to tears.

So now you know that I truly loved you
And now that I told you
I think its time to say,
I have to let you go…

1. What do you think about the message? Is it clear?
2. What do I need to work on?

Poetry?

~Sam~

What is pain?

Is it being with you and not seeing that you could leave,

Or is it knowing that we won’t be together forever

Like I had planned.

The talks we had

The tears I shed

How do they make you feel?

When you look over me and see

That I’m having a hard time without you.

There was no one else that I thought

That would love me as you did

Whenever I came home you were always the first to greet me.

So imagine my surprise and sorrow

When I come home and you aren’t there to greet me anymore

You have been with me since almost day one

You have always held a special place in my heart.

When you decided it was time to go

Did you think about the lives that would be changed forever?

For now whenever I think of you

My heart feels heavy and I’m always close to tears.

So now you know that I truly loved you

And now that I told you

I think its time to say,

Adieu.

(So I know that its not supposed to rhyme so I am changing the ending but I liked it this way and decided that I wanted to post it as is)